The Rockery – Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Flash Fiction for for Aspiring Writers is a writing challenge, kindly hosted by Priceless Joy. The challenge asks us to write a piece of fiction from the photo prompt provided in around 100- 150 words – give or take 25 words. It encourages participants to comment, constructively, on other entries, so supporting each other’s writing. If you’d like to join in with this challenge, follow the link in the title of PJ’s, blog: Beautiful Words to see what to do. The challenge runs from Wednesday to Wednesday every week.

Here is this week’s prompt, kindly provided by Dawn M. Miller . . .

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and this is my story for this week . . .

‘You’d be better off selling this old place,’ David said, twisting to face his mother on the veranda. ‘You can’t cope with this big house now that Dad’s gone …’

Mildred was pleased her son didn’t pursue the matter of his father’s leaving. She’d known about Ralph’s affair with Doris for months and was glad to see the back of him.

‘And that huge garden … I know you said Dad built that rockery, but it’s a great eyesore and needs shifting. You can’t do that on your own.’

‘The rockery holds fond memories of your father, David, and I wouldn’t dream of shifting it. If I change my mind, my new handyman, Eric, can deal with it.’

Mildred sipped her tea, willing David to go home. Tonight Eric would join her for drinks in the garden. She’d raise her wine glass to the rockery, silently wishing her husband a peaceful night’s rest, before embarking on a bit of rough and tumble between the sheets with Eric.

Word Count: 166

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About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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31 Responses to The Rockery – Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

  1. John Yeo says:

    Wonderful finish Millie ~These days the children can’t take the hint or keep up ~ More power ti Mildred and Eric

  2. Sonya says:

    Oooh, did she dispose of Ralph, then? That’s the way I’m reading it… and I like it 😀

  3. draliman says:

    Ha, marvellous and very well told! A woman scorned and all that. Let’s hope she has better luck with Eric, or that rockery is going to start getting crowded 🙂

  4. luckyjc007 says:

    Now that’s what I call really moving on! Eric better “watch his P’s and Q’s” or he may be part of a rock display! Great story!

  5. Creatopath says:

    Loved the ending (made me laugh) and I thought she must have disposed of Ralph under the rockery. No wonder she didn’t want David moving it!

  6. I loved this humorous story! I started laughing at these words, “..and was glad to see the back of him.” Haha! I believe she deserves a romp inbetween the sheets with Eric. In fact, she will probably have a wonderful life from here through the future while her husband’s life will be miserable with Doris. Hahaha!

  7. Good to see Mildred moving on, but I wonder whether Mildred and Eric will live happily ever after 😛 Nice story Millie! 🙂

  8. That’d be the last time he cheats on her!

  9. Susan Langer says:

    Brilliant story. I wondered why she was resistant to shift the rockery…hmmmm. 🙂

    • milliethom says:

      I’m glad you got my meaning with that, Susan! I know one or two people have put a more innocent interpretation on it. And that’s OK. All stories are open to interpretation, after all. 🙂

  10. Dave says:

    Naughty naughty. I’m scandalized. (No, not really, Hell Hath No Fury etc.)

  11. Hahahahaha – this truly cracked up my Saturday morning. Love it! (Yeah, …go away child, mummy needs to get up to no good, damn it!)

  12. o wow, murder love and all the drama involved. Nice!

  13. Tastyniblets says:

    haha love this one Millie – no wonder she’s so attached to the old place – she can’t give up her secret!

  14. scrapydotwo says:

    Lovely compressed love and murder story. Very interesting. I see some problems coming

    • milliethom says:

      Oh, I’m sure nasty Mildred won’t get away with it. It won’t be very long before Doris starts wondering where her ‘lover’ has got to, for a start. Thanks for the nice comment, Scrapydo. 🙂

      • scrapydotwo says:

        Yes, things like that can’t be covered up for ever. (Still enjoying your book! I am a slow reader, will take some time to finish it but it is still very interesting!)

      • milliethom says:

        Thank you for those kind words! I’m just
        grateful that you’re reading my book at all. 🙂

  15. Ellespeth says:

    S’wonderful! Love this!
    Ellespeth

    • milliethom says:

      Thank you for that nice comment, Ellespeth. I hopped over a minute ago and read yours. But our Internet went off (as it does regularly in our rural village!) and I don’t think the comment was sent. I’ll write it out again, so if you end up with two, just delete one!

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